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How dare you?
Who are you to place yourself so high above me?
Are you a divine being? a God?
What makes you so superior to me?
You have done nothing to deserve my respect,
and yet you try to place yourself in a better rank.
You are nothing to me,
so don't you dare expect me to honor you.
Respect is not a right, it is a privilege.
to all those people who think they did the world a favor just by being born
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree wholeheartedly :heart:
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PsychoticLaughter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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loreball Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
After reading your verse, i think is very interesting and i agree with your words about people who think better tha others when they really arent.
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PsychoticLaughter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thank you
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Ravenholm Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If you're going to abide by "respect is a privilege", expect it to go both ways - you've not earned the respect of the target of your poem and they're treating you accordingly. It's up to you if you want to give a shit about some moron's respect, and this poem reads like hypocrisy, because you seem to demand respect (Who are you to place yourself so high above me?) while declaring loudly and proudly that they've nothing to deserve your respect. I agree with a comment above me. Yuo do sound ironically arrogant.

As for the poem's construction, free verse does permit rambling, but the way you've arranged your words reads like a blog post.
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PsychoticLaughter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It wasn't my intention to offend anyone, or sound arrogent.
I was just overwelmed with anger and wrote this to express my frustation.
I am still unfamiliar with which category to put my poems under. If my poems sound like a blog post that wasn't my motive.
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Ravenholm Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's ok. I'd probably put this in the vignette category. It's suitable for less structured free verses, that's where I usually put my spur of the moment free verse poetry.
Secondly, and now this isn't criticism, just a suggestion. Perhaps try to look into different types of poetry, their structure and rhythm. I've grievances with most dA poetry, because young poets often seem to neglect the craft, and I think that emotion coupled with a decent rhythm and structure could actually end up sublime some day. Thanks for understanding, I might've been a bit adasf foot in mouth in the original comment, too. :lol:
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PsychoticLaughter Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you so much for the tips
not many people around me write poems so I'm really grateful for your advice.^^
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Tianithen Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Respect should be earned. I don't respect anyone until I feel they deserve it, however I'm still polite to everyone I meet, at least at first.
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